Elevator Pitch #2
I didn't really get a lot of helpful feedback from my peers. This isn't unusual, it was just inconvenient, so I decided to think about what I didn't like about my last one and worked from there. I made a couple of my own changes including:
1) I changed my elevator pitch to focus on mothers.
2) I changed my opening to look more polished and less awkward.
3) I shortened my script to get my message across more quickly and effectively.
1) I changed my elevator pitch to focus on mothers.
2) I changed my opening to look more polished and less awkward.
3) I shortened my script to get my message across more quickly and effectively.
Hey Julia,
ReplyDeleteOverall, I found your product interesting and thought you did well describing how it meets the needs of consumers. I thought your introduction was very unique, but definitely helped to identify the targeted customers and their needs. It is always smart to shorten the script for your pitch, as concision is important to communicating in business. Overall, this was a good pitch that could be improved by further memorizing the script.
Julia,
ReplyDeleteI thought your presentation as a whole was very good. I liked how you asked questions and outlined the problem that you are looking to solve. I think that the market you are looking to get a corner in is a growing one because people are always looking to make their lives easier and make tedious tasks such a cleaning go by faster. I'm curious to see what your invention would look like in a sketch!
-Kerry
Hey Julia,
ReplyDeleteThis was a very good pitch of your company and gave very convincing arguments. You came out with ample energy and structured the entire pitch in a way that kept me captivated the entire time that you were giving the pitch. This is important because when you are in front of a group of investor you don't want them falling asleep on you.